haiku one eight six.

Hello all!

I have been struggling (oh what a surprise) a bit over the last few days. I’ve been really trying to imbue my haiku with meaning. I feel like I’m failing completely. Should I even go into it and possibly ruin the mystique of my poems? Or is that an insult to the 10 people who actually read this blog? Maybe my double entendre’s/meanings are blindingly obvious! Feel free to let me know. Firstly a revision from yesterday.

church steps

three boys practise their

skateboarding

a five-star hotel

parklands provide lodgings

for the homeless

the space between

neon lights and the window

summer night rain

summer downpour

a damp smell in the hotel

loading dock

summer rain

steam rises from

the path light

Ok that’s an awful lot of use of the words “summer” and references to rain. What can I say It rained a lot today.

Thanks for reading!

Peace.

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About El Norto

I write haiku. This is my haiku journal.
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2 Responses to haiku one eight six.

  1. No explanation needed- these were some good ones.

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