43.

Ungainly ibis

                   shakes overhead

                                             as I run through the lane.

 

I’m breaking free of the 5-7-5 syllables, and capitals and lots of punctuation. Mostly after reading Janice M Bostok’s website. I’d provide the link but I can’t be bothered. She’s an Australian haiku writer, and she’s put forward some convincing arguments (not that I needed much convincing!) to abandon the restrictiveness of a tradition that wasn’t from the original form of haiku. Although haiku was 17 syllables Japanese haiku were written in a single vertical line. I may even move towards single line haiku, like Marlene Mountain. I think it’s something worth exploring.

Here’s one I did just for a laugh:

 

You are guilty

but I wont convict you of

assholism!

 

It’s obviously influenced by one of my favourite directors early notorious films. Yes John Waters ‘Pink flamingoes’!

Peace.

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About El Norto

I write haiku. This is my haiku journal.
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